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On 10/8/17 10:05 am, Burcu Kilic wrote:<br>
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<pre wrap="">I am not sure why you guys are just mentioning human rights NGOs. How about consumer organizations or development NGOs? They play an important role in trade negotiations, and they have lots to say when it comes to digital rights and freedoms. </pre>
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OK, I've edited the last paragraph (now two paragraphs) to reflect
suggestions and edits by you, David Snead (in part), Susan Aaronson,
and Jyoti Panday, but I don't think we're there yet. The last two
paragraphs now read:<br>
<ul>
<li>Internet users, human rights NGOs, consumer organizations, and
development NGOs are stakeholders in Internet governance and
hence countries should include representatives of these
organizations in their trade advisory bodies, including
implementation bodies.</li>
<li>Countries must require that trade advisory bodies and
processes generally operate in open forums, are subject to
public observance and are provided timely access to
documentation.</li>
</ul>
They used to read:<br>
<ul>
<li>Countries must require balanced representation on any trade
advisory bodies or processes, including implementation bodies,
and require that they reflect all interests potentially affected
and generally operate in open forums subject to public
observance and access to documentation.<br>
</li>
</ul>
We have lost the word "balanced" and gained a second bullet point
that David (who should know because he has served on a Trade
Advisory Committee) finds problematic. Since we already have a
paragraph about opening up proposals to a notice and comment and
public hearing process, I suggest we lose the second bullet point
above and return to a single paragraph which would focus on
stakeholder inclusion, saying:<br>
<ul>
<li>Countries should make trade advisory bodies and implementation
bodies more balanced by taking proactive steps to include more
diverse stakeholders such as representatives of Internet users,
consumer organizations, and experts in human rights and
development.</li>
</ul>
<p>Does that sound any better?<br>
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